The speech piece I translated for a student was edited by another teacher working at another school. Apparently, a Japanese teacher had asked him to check the piece. It had become one with impact to one riddled with weird English sentences that do not flow.
This is the beginning part of what I wrote.

It was changed to this.

Now, what does "it is a kind of seal made of ivory which was handed down from her father" mean to you?
To me, it means that the seal is
the kind made from ivory handed down from 'her father'. It is suggesting that there are other people with this kind of seal, seals made from ivory handed down from 'her father'. Ridiculous! Also, the sentence structure is incorrect. The words 'which was' are not needed and totally disrupt the flow of the sentence.
The first few lines have such glaring oddness that I do not even need to point them out. Then there's the rest of the article.
On to happier things.
Yesterday, I decided to visit Chichibu; the city where I officially started my life in Japan.
There were so many things to see, so many places to go; places I had never been to while I was staying there. Without a car/bike, these places are inconvenient to reach, if at all possible.
Driving back, I felt a sense of nostalgia, homecoming and an urge to shit (I did, at a supermarket along the way).


On the way there. Yorii.



Nagatoro. A short distance from Chichibu. This place is famous for river boat rides.

Upon reaching Chichibu, I went to the dam I had seen so many times from train windows.


Urayama Dam.







Urayama river and greenery.











Behind and around the dam.
Next.
On the dam, from the dam.







A view of the city from the dam.




View of the reservoir from the dam.
Around the dam.




Can you see the cars?Below the dam.





Stairs leading down. Let's go.
Not!Some others.










Moving on. Hitsujiyama park. 羊山公園.

Sheep.




I was telling my story and it just said "mehhhh".




View from the top of Hitsujiyama Park.





I used to stay in one of the houses! Not the one above though.


Looking for tenants. Would you like to stay in this↑ or this↓? 

Spending my time, watching the train go by...However, you shouldn't. Your boss might catch you!
Shhhh...